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Character discriptions for text story

I want to start this story idea as a text story to develop my writing skills but there are three things I need to define first: the story title, the character names and general discriptions, and the chapter title. I also have several parrallel story arcs happening so I have to decide who's story to start in the first chapter.

Working novel title:
Llaprami
I like the double L as in llama so I figure that could be a good name for the creatures as they are found in the rain forest near the Andes Mountains (where llamas are found). I might come up with a more discriptive or innovative title but this one should be unique for now.

The main character is a human but the main subject is the creatures (who I will call the Llaprami from now on - plural and singular spelled the same) so I think the first chapter will be the political struggles of the Llaprami where the reader will not realize at first that they are not humans. I will have to come up with a name for humans in the Llaprami language to maintain the ruse. A group of pygmi humans in that general area are called the Yamomama (not sure of the spelling) so Llomamo will work for the name for humans (double L is often pronounced as a Y sound). The Llomamo (humans) are the subject of the debates among the Llaprami that they will have in the first chapter so...

First chapter title:
Llomamo

Because the name for humans and the name given to the creatures will be sourced from the local humans, the double L thing and the Latin-language 5 vowel sound restriction thing are not neccessarily typical for the non-human Llaprami so I will have a more panther-like vocal sound to their names.

Traditionalist male character:
Augraesta (awe-oo GREY east stay - roll that R!)

Militant thinking male:
Raegaeg (RAW e GAY eag - ends as in eagle, purr on the R)

Young female friend:
Earesea (e AIR ease SEE eh - hold and purr on that R for half the total word time)

name for one's own mother:
Himeu (HIM me you)

Some cultural rules
- names are never used directly when the person is not present so phrases like "the one named Himeu showed me" would be used. Using such phrases in the presense of the person indicates that they do not consider them present as a insult or specifically that they are rejecting the last statement by that person ("I never heard that because in my mind, you are not here"). It (using the name indirectly in the person's presence) can also be used as praise in the future tense because all the great deceased are spoken of that way ("I honour the one we called Daurieg for her great conquests before her final sacrifice for her people" and when proposing to Earesea, "She who will be known as Earesea has my eternal love")

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akktri
Jan. 5th, 2007 05:02 pm (UTC)
Descriptions
I despise websites containing isolated character descriptions, for the mere fact that those descriptions should have been woven into the story (and not slapped on in an info dump). When I first started writing, I did a lot of that, but, frankly, it doesn't work. A story doesn't begin with an idea, it begins with a sentence.
And, again, your rule about "the one called" is working to your disadvantage. I suggest you break it. Brevity is the writer's friend.
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